This is really well done. The biggest issue I see is that you didn't do the best is terms of lighting. From what I see the primary light source would be from behind banshee's leg. so it would've been best to think of the shadows based on that light source, then move onto the beam sabers as the secondary light source. also it would've looked better if there was a glare on the armor cause of the sabers.
I would change the pose of the Unicorn. The way the legs are positioned relative to the way the torso is bent just doesn't look natural. Maybe it's just me. I would also remove or reposition the shield as it hurts the Unicorn's silhouette, since in this picture, you are trying to achieve dynamic poses.
Another thing that stands out for me is the lack of shadows in the picture. The background shows a definite light source yet the lighting of both Gundams does not match the background. I would choose a different background which is less distracting and much easier to light. Even though this is toon shaded, lack of shadows just makes the overall picture look flat.
try a slight distortion around the border of the gundams [sonic-boom effect] lighting angle is another issue here esp for the white guy get some rocks floating in front of the white and black guys and i believe its would be better to change the setting as in a asteroid belt and those 2 are fighting inside the rocks, knocking some rocks away and some added dust to make the sword trails more visble
Damn, nice work. I'll agree they do look a little out of place, but it doesn't look like a hard job to fix it. True, I don't know how myself, but I'm hoping you do . I do like how you've blurred the feet slightly, adding more focus the the battle at hand...
I recognize Unicorn, so I'm guessing the black version is Banshee. I like it. Personally, I'd put a shield on the outside of it's Gatling Gun weapons, then I'd like it even more - firepower when needed, protection the rest of the time - but that's just me...
shadows are strong. also, there would be light reflecting off of their sabers. because there are also light sources going into the camera, like the nova by the banshee's foot, the foot would look a lot darker in comparison.
models themselves look fairly good. altho, the image seems too busy. >_>
i'd suggest, squeezing your eyes and flipping the image. try to see the composition, not as two mechas battling but just shapes. try to find pleasing shapes in negative and positive spaces. meaning within and between gundams and the edges of the image. squares in the image generally not good. and there is just too many paralel lines crossing eachother in right angles, that makes the image almost grid-like.
i know that's basic design but that just happens to be working in most cases ^_^
that's my two cents sorry for any inconveniences. hope i'd be of some help ^_^
it looks good, but I think the background is too full. remove this background, and render it on just an empty space with stars and maybe some rubbish flying around.... but no planets or large lights on the background! then I think it would look absolutely great!
I'll be honest. I didnt like it (I know that no one says bad thing in DA, but I just felt like it) Maybe it is this kind of mechas or weapons they have, the colors or the background. But some thing just doesnt feel like it should to me. I dont say that it is done poorly, but I dont say that it is perfect. One of the thing that catches my eye is that the mechas and the background doesnt match the same style and that just doesnt look good. Maybe if you would look at them seperately thay would look better. Thanks for reading my small review (I dont qualify myself as a good reviewer, actualy i dont think of myself as a medium review writer) I hope you understood my point of view
very good, i like this kind of crits... just be honest love it or hate it, cuz even in my pov, i also dont like it.. i still feels something off somewhere.. that is why i posted it up, to get other opinions
free critique, because I'm too cheap. Would you be able to tone down the brightness on the white guy? He seems to just be glowing, it seems unnatural to me. also, could you spread out the asteroid belt? It's very flat, it looks like there are no extra ones that are higher than the others. Or lower, for that matter.
Sorry for butting in like this...but "sourced from google"? That means that somewhere someone else made the image you're using as a background and you didn't even credit them, that's wrong. Go and learn how to make similar images, it's honestly not that hard and DA is full of "planet tutorials". By doing that the quality of your work would skyrocket, at least in my eyes. Now it just seems like stealing and abuse.
As for critique on the parts which are not "sourced from google" :
Look at the poses and think about how they would have gotten into such a position while fighting. It looks weird, partly as the black seems stationary, pointing his sword and the white seems to have just noticed the other one and decided to highfive it. It lacks dynamism.
There's only four colors in there, but the black has two very contrasting choices. The white/red works a lot better. There are no directional shadows and the background suggests that light is coming from far left/front and also from the clash of the sabers...looks way off and makes the picture even more discomforting. The glowing bits on the black distract more than anything else, suggest you tone that down or make the black a bit lighter. That would also help to define the shapes of the black one more clearly.
Don't "source" from Google, you could have browsed through DA's sci-fi wallpaper gallery and ask someone for permission.
Well, the BG as it is distracts from the action, so if it's a work in process you might as well get rid of it to draw focus onto your mechs. I don't want to report this, if you've asked for the premission then you should have just waited for the response and go without a background until then You can edit the deviation, no need to delete or anything.
Saying "report it, I don't care" makes it feel like you don't appreciate your art